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Title: Her and I: A Love That Darkness Shown - ShortStory


Syarith - April 1, 2008 01:03 AM (GMT)
He said "No, I won't..I cant betray you." Then, she walked out, with no goodbye. Took the bus to the other world of torment to forget about him. He then had a massive heart attack the next day. Then, the darkhearted teenager said "Fine..I dont need you anymore. I see how it is. I hate you too.You never helped me when I needed a shoulder to cry on. You hurt me when I was already down. You've made my life so much worse than it was before. You are so cruel and thoughtless. You are not understanding or caring. So, just leave me, I don't want anything to do with you anymore! You were my life and my love, but now I'm alone..."...He then died the next day....

Then she came back..and found his body lying on the ground and cried..but crying only made her suffer much worse than she already was..and then she took a sample of his DNA. Then, she went back to the other dimension and cloned him..but was still crying after seeing her project come to a success because of the real him dying...and she couldnt stop. And now, she only wishes that she could bring the original back to life, and gather her tears so she could drown him in them...

Edel. - April 1, 2008 01:43 AM (GMT)
Short and confusing with not much of... a story.. How he died the next day? What other world did she go to and how did she clone him? Why did she leave him in the first place anywase?

pigtopus - April 1, 2008 09:40 AM (GMT)
Cloning~~~

Syarith - April 2, 2008 01:19 AM (GMT)
QUOTE (Edel. @ Mar 31 2008, 07:43 PM)
Short and confusing with not much of... a story.. How he died the next day? What other world did she go to and how did she clone him? Why did she leave him in the first place anywase?

I never finished it, so I'll explain this in a way that woulda been a dumb ending.

In that dimension they had a cloning machine. She had a lock of his hair and used that as a DNA sample, and producing and cloning him.

He died of a heart attack. If you recall it was a heart attack that he was suffering from and people die from those in reality.

She left him because he was 'too good to be true' in her mind.

Edel. - April 2, 2008 04:30 AM (GMT)
Oh quite confusing. And why did she take him for granted?

Syarith - April 2, 2008 05:00 AM (GMT)
QUOTE (Edel. @ Apr 1 2008, 10:30 PM)
Oh quite confusing. And why did she take him for granted?

Because, well. She wanted to be with the person she loved and dreamed of, NOT the perfect guy like everyone else, but someone different. However, she was blind, and she decided to date him. And then later on, she discovered he was like all the others wanted him to be ,just not her. So then , she had a 'false love' for him throughout the entire relationship and she couldn't bare it anymore. Plus, secretly before she even left him she was already having affairs with another guy WHILE she was still dating him. On that note, the person she was having affairs with is the person who she "truly" fell in love with. It was as if she never liked the guy in the first place and just used him as a pawn to get her hands on something more...satisfying to her. And thats what she did. A lot of detail i forgot to put into this story, but eh, like i said i never finished it.

Edel. - April 2, 2008 05:04 AM (GMT)
so uh confused again, who was she using? The guy she used or the guy that she loved?

Syarith - April 2, 2008 05:05 AM (GMT)
She was using the original guy who he THOUGHT she loved when it was false love as a pawn to get to the guy she actually loved.

Edel. - April 2, 2008 05:08 AM (GMT)
So who actually died? the guy who she didnt love or the one that she loved? And where in teh first post there was another guy in there?

Syarith - April 2, 2008 05:10 AM (GMT)
Like I said , in the original story , I did not include the guy she Truly loved , because i mainly wanted to focus on the one guy and her, and the conflict between each one.

The one who died of the heart attack the one who she didn't wanna be with in the first place.

Edel. - April 2, 2008 05:11 AM (GMT)
Why did she clone him anywase??? Even thou she didnt want to be wtih him?

Syarith - April 2, 2008 05:35 AM (GMT)
Think of it as something from the chapter The Martian of Ray Bradbury's The Martian Chronicles. The Martian is a shape-shifter that changes into people, but think of it like this. The martian only changes into someone when somebody whos lost a loved one wants them back, and then the Martian would play mind games with them, making the ordinary human see that the person they thought were dead are very much alive - a very misleading and deceiving tactic.

Think of it like that but in this case, the GIRL is the one caring about the best friend even tho she didnt like him as a boyfriend she still care about him on best friend terms. Anyways, the girl cares for him and didn't want to accept his death so she took a lock of his hair and cloned him. However, she couldn't bare the thought of having a clone of him and not the original, so she cried and felt bad.

Though in the end.. and i didnt add this in to the original but i will now. In the end she pulled a gun and shot the clone, and killed it. Then she cried for a short while. And was never seen or heard from again because she ran off with her new love.

Edel. - April 2, 2008 03:44 PM (GMT)
oO... weird a** story...




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