Read http://clounge.org/index.php?showtopic=4308 and then you will understand the story. :P



The dawn breaks and the orange moon shine beyond the dark black sea. With the reflection of the moon in the water. I felt as ease and waiting for me to pass me slowly. The change inside me is not what i wanted. I wanted something esle but not this. This creature inside me, that lurk deep inside me. The craving for human blood. The thrill of murder. My nerves get into shock and I cannot feel a thing. A feeling.. there is none lefted. Just a bitter person. A bitter girl. I stared at the ground where my victim laid. I wipe off the blood from my lips and grined. Is this the path that I wanted. The path to escape from the other path that i couldn't run away. Is running away what is best of me? I picked up the dead body and threw it in the sea. To the person I took a life from. I am feeling no regret that i have taken your life. I just hope that you will forgive me for doing such a disgusting thing. YES! It disgust me, but yet it's the only way I can live. Death wasnt enough for me, and yet i go day by day killing, murdering, mothers, fathers, sons, daughters, child, babies. Inorder for me to live. I blame the man! It was all his fault.

Someone whisper, "This is what you wanted right? This is your wish isn't it? All the people you took. Their lives. Don't tell me you don't know who they are."

I closed my eyes and fell to the ground. No please don't remind me of who i took as my victims... Please no... I cried.

"They were you're... fa...mi........."

I turned around and a wind blew passed me. With tears in my eyes. How can i do such a horrible thing. It was only a wish, something that is not possible to happen. What have i done? Why must it happen?

And again I passed out.

Well, there were a lot of mechanical errors in this. Also, I felt that it could be much more detailed. From the previous story, for instance, it says that the man got out of the shower and covered the main character in a blanket. This sentence could have been expanded a lot.

Other than the lack of detail and the myriad mechanical errors, it was quite good. I think that if this were detailed more it could have been pulled off a lot better, and added a lot of depth and interest to the story.

Why thank you! Like seriously =]. Iunno. I just didnt want to get so into it, because I know that I wouldn't have gotten done with it. I only type stories when i am bored of everything esle I do. But i do like seriously! enjoyed your comment. =]